Cohesion and Clarity
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Correct: A few mice died. (The meaning is equivalent to “Some mice died.”) Also correct: Few mice died. (The meaning is equivalent to “Not many mice died.”) √ Introduce a term before using its acronym or abbreviation. In your paper, introduce an abbreviation at first mention of the term, and then use it consistently thereafter. Incorrect: We then applied the model to evaluate the risk of lung cancer among smokers enrolled in a study of lung cancer screening with CT (computed tomography). Correct: We then applied the model to evaluate the risk of lung cancer among smokers enrolled in a study of lung cancer screening with computed tomography (CT). (From Bach et al., 2003) Incorrect: The loss of function of specific genes known as metastasis suppressor genes (MSGs) is an important event during the progression toward a malignant phenotype. These metastasis suppressor genes suppress the formation of overt metastases… . Correct: The loss of function of specific genes known as metastasis suppressor genes (MSGs) is an important event during the progression toward a malignant phenotype. MSGs suppress the formation of overt metastases…. (From Keller et al., 2002)
Note: In general, do not use an abbreviation in a manuscript unless the term is used 5 or more times.
Activity 2
In the 3 sentences below, how can the sentences be made stronger by changing the words in bold?
1. The prevalence of obesity has increased a lot worldwide. (From List & Habener, 2003)
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