Cohesion and Clarity
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daughters of AB, which generate about half of the hypodermis, nervous system, and pharynx, did not have extended life-spans. (From Wolkow et al., 2000)
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Studies of daf-2 genetic mosaic animals showed that
animals lacking daf-2 activity
mosaic animals lacking daf-2 activity from blastomere daughters of AB,
from the entire AB cell lineage,
which generates
which generate
nearly all of the hypodermis and nervous system
about half of the hypodermis, nervous system, and pharynx,
and half of the pharynx,
have extended life-spans.
did not have extended life-spans.
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These MHC proteins with their antigen fragments act like red flags, drawing the attention of the immune system’s T cells, which either kill cells carrying the antigens outright or orchestrate an attack by various other immune players. (From Hagmann, 2000)
These MHC proteins with their antigen fragments act like red flags,
drawing the attention of the immune system’s T cells, which either
kill cells carrying the antigens outright
or
orchestrate an attack by various other immune players.
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